Rising Up - A Gears of war Fan Fic

**smurf plastic** · 06-18-2009, 02:39 PM

Make them seem more of a threat like Boss said. Maybe one of the squad members gets hit. One says, 'wait, humans' showing concern. That kind of stuff. 20 guys with automatic weaponry are still a force to be reckoned with.
Other than that a good read with nice, varying fighting parts.

**SKORGE** · 06-18-2009, 03:54 PM

Nice work man, keep it coming. Make sure you add some Stranded death's leadter on... Never can hurt!

**Cog Edward** · 06-19-2009, 08:46 AM

Originally Posted by Jay the Arbiter

Locust clans seem to be rising up these days (See what i did there?

)

Anyway, good stuff!

Heh, yeah. Anyways I hope to be making chapters even faster since I'm back to 100 %!

**Cog Edward** · 06-19-2009, 08:47 AM

And thanks for the other comments. I hope next chapter will be better.

**CanOGears** · 06-20-2009, 12:03 AM

Thats was awesome, can't wait for more Edward

**WaldoRtk7** · 06-20-2009, 12:19 AM

Flow was a little choppy at the beginning but you figured it out after that and it went great. Great Job with the details and everything!

**Wardog313** · 06-20-2009, 12:51 AM

that was great keep it up.

**Cog Edward** · 06-20-2009, 12:52 AM

@ WaldoRtk7: Thanks man. I hope it continues to go that way. except the beginning part.

@ CanOGears: Thanks. Should be more out by tomorrow.

@KILLER WARDOG: Thanks. Never seen you around, but nice to see new people are reading.

Maybe tomorrow will be something new guys.

**Cog Edward** · 06-20-2009, 07:19 AM

A shock indeed in this chapter!

Chapter 8: Clash Of The Titans

Jarnix walked with Zumn and Reluk to the Theron Guard training spot. Zumn and Reluk couldn't wait. They've wanted to be Therons for ever. Now their leader was giving them their dreams. As they arrived, the two Therons guarding the door quickly moved aside and bowed their heads as the trio walked in.

"Thank you Jarnix for this wonderful occasion." Reluk thanked as he kept moving forward.

"Yeah, thanks I can not wait!" Zumn added.

Jarnix simply grinned and nodded and lead them to a Theron Sentinel.

"He shall be your leader in this training. Be good and don't give up!" Jarnix appointed with a growl. The two nodded fast scared of the beast. The two new members followed the Theron as Jarnix walked back out. Again the Therons nodded as Jarnix saw that the rest of the group was awaiting his arrival.

"Any news Kendron?" Jarnix shouted as he approached them.

"Yes, the ground walkers shall be in a march towards their city called 'Ilma'." Hissed Kendron as he quickly turned to see Jarnix.

"But the Lambent are supposed to attack today!" Venju added with a look of confusion.

"I want to smash glowing heads!" Rouhk boomed as he cackled.

"Alright, enough." Jarnix snapped as he smirked and looked at Venju and Rouhk. "You two go fight the Lambent. Kendron and I will deal with the Humans." Jarnix replied.

Rouhk and Venju quickly nodded as Venju lead the way towards the volunteers that would protect the hollow from the Lambent.

Jarnix started to stump away with Kendron quickly following him step by step.

"Status." Jarnix ordered while walking towards the reaver pen.

"Horde will leave in twenty minutes sir." Kendron worriedly hissed looking around.

"We'll make it don't worry." Jarnix sighed as he walked the stairs inside the pen.

The two got on Kendron's hydra as Kendron commanded it to move up. It quickly responded with a growl as it was sent flying up trying to find the location of Ilma and the perfect digging spot. Wind blew in the two Blood Seekers face as Jarnix closed his eyes and sighed. The Hydra quickly re grouped with the rest as Kendron warned that there were only five minutes left. The hole started to open as a bunch of drones and grenadiers started to climb up. The Blood Seekers quickly re joined them as the Hydra flew up and out of the already opened fresh emergence hole. Locust drones were all over the place with blood covering half of the streets.

"Vile beasts!" Kendron hissed as he quickly saw ammo shoot towards them. "Colonel, duck!" He warned as Jarnix and Kendron ducked their heads. The humans shot the hydra instead as it yelped in pain and took a quick landing in a near spot. Jarnix and Kendron got down as they took cover.

Drones were getting slaughtered as the COG shot their terrifying tanks at the horde. Locust and locust blood was sent to the air as Jarnix closed his eyes not wanting to see the horror. Rotten smell filled the air as maggots and flies ate the dead soldiers from Sera. Locust died, humans died. This wretched world was filled with war. The COG tenderized and cut the locust with their lancer chain saws cutting them into pieces. Every killed soldier was a lost soul. The Locust started to fight back even better just killing a few of the percent of the humans. The tank still shot blowing locust into chunks sending body pieces up like bullets and blood like a back wards rain.

The only thing everyone knew, was war. War started this wretched fight and war was gonna end it. The COG seemed to have the upper hand as Jarnix growled at this sight. Jarnix roared as he started to throw three of his grenades. It did damage sending humans to their deaths, but not enough. Jarnix knew the Tank was the main problem. He grabbed his last grenade and aimed it carefully. Trying not to waste it. He estimated the shot and the distance as he kept swinging the grenade in circles not ready to shoot it yet as he hoped his plan would work.

"With all due respect sir, a simple grenade won't destroy such a monster." Kendron growled as Jarnix simply grinned.

"Just watch."

Jarnix care fully threw his grenade as it landed perfectly inside the shooter of the tank. Jarnix pulled himself back into cover knowing the blast was gonna send pieces. Locust also took cover as Cog started to run into further cover and the COG in the tank tried to get off but the grenade exploded making the inside of the tank blow up which meant that the whole tank blew into smithereens as well as close COG. That event took a lot of damage as the COG kept fighting. Jarnix caught something in the edge of his right eye as he turned to see what it was. A COG soldier was running for his life with a child about thirteen years old.

"Stay here." Jarnix ordered Kendron as he got up and ran to their direction.
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"C'mon, we got to get going," Called out the man. "Hurry!" The man had a standard COG armor with spiked down hair colored dark brown.

"I'm trying!" The kid replied. He was a soldier in the army as he had a youth normal standard Cog armor. He was about 4'12 as he had spiked down hair also and was colored light brown. The kid gasped in horror as he turned around in fright. Jarnix was charging for the grown man as the kid quickly shouted to the man to move out of the way.

The man moved as Jarnix's fist flew in the air hitting nothing. Jarnix made a loud Roar as he ran towards the human. The kid watched in horror as he knew the man had no chance.

The man shot wildly at the incoming Jarnix, but no luck. Jarnix quickly slapped the gun out of his hands and shot a fist straight into the man's gut. He coughed a bit and spat out blood as the Cog took a brave Punch at Jarnix's face. It made damage but Jarnix got angry with his decision as he grabbed him by the neck and was about to smash his face into pieces as the kid ran towards Jarnix and shot his foot.

"Let go of my dad you locust scum!" He yelled as Jarnix yelped and screamed from pain. He quickly snapped out of it and threw the kids dad aside walking towards the now backing away child.

"Puny human! Be gone!" Jarnix boomed as he picked up the young COG and aimed a boltok to his head. Suddenly the man that was down shot lancer bullets into Jarnix's arm. The man had found his gun as he grinned and growled.

Jarnix yelped as he let go of the child yanking something out first. He felt it was kind of metallic as he turned his attention to his wounded arm. The kid fell down and ran towards safety as the man reved up his chainsaw and tried to go for the kill. Jarnix had too much attention towards the kid running that by the time Jarnix realized the man was charging, it was too late. Jarnix was able to dodge but with a cost. The chainsaw cut deep into his mouth and threw pieces of Jarnix's skin on the floor. Jarnix yelped from the pain. He pushed his head back as blood gushed out of his open mouth. A terrible deep painful cut had been injected to Jarnix as he moved his head around with pain. The man decided not to take any more chances as he ran away with the still alive kid.

Jarnix ran towards Kendron who was cheering victory with the other remaining eight locust. Two Theron Guards, two drones, one grenadier, one cyclops and two grenadier elites. Their rides and Kendron's Hydra was also present. Kendron saw that Jarnix was running towards him. He also noticed that blood was gushing from his hand that was covering his mouth. Too much blood to be a simple wound.

"Colonel! Quick, we need to go to a hospital!" Kendron gasped in horror as Jarnix climbed on board with the trusty second in command Kendron.

The others also got on their rides. And if some did not have rides, other locust would let them join for the ride. The Hydra that the two Blood Seekers were on went down first rushing through the tunnel. The others followed safely into the hole as the last ones there quickly closed the open wound on the ground. On the way to the hospital, Jarnix held up the thing he had yanked from the child.It was a necklace. It was a COG tag! He could barley see from the darkness of the hollow but he could read good enough. The text clearly read, "Private Edward Cane". Jarnix growled still holding his mouth with one hand, and crushing the tag with the other hand into pieces.
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Cast

Jay the Arbiter as Venju

**TheRealBigBoss** · 06-20-2009, 05:37 PM

Yeah, much better interaction between the COG and the Locust. One question though, Edward was a Gear at age thirteen? I think you need to be at least sixteen years of age before you can sign up to be a Gear.

**smurf plastic** · 06-20-2009, 05:52 PM

I have to agree with Boss, I really got the feel that though the COG were slaughtering the Locust hordes upon hordes were swarming out. I liked the ending. A little nipping and chopping and you got yourself a perfect chapter.

**Jay the Arbiter** · 06-20-2009, 06:35 PM

Still going strong!

**Cog Edward** · 06-20-2009, 10:10 PM

Originally Posted by TheRealBigBoss

Yeah, much better interaction between the COG and the Locust. One question though, Edward was a Gear at age thirteen? I think you need to be at least sixteen years of age before you can sign up to be a Gear.

Well I got it from the big wars people have gone through. Most of them let people in if they are 13 or older.That's why I did that.

And thanks everyone else for your comments.

**Cog Edward** · 06-30-2009, 06:07 AM

Chapter 9: Hospitalized

Jarnix layed on the hospital bed blinking slowly and staring at the blank light buzzing on top of his little room. He took slow and steady breaths from all the blood loss and the sleeping gas the locust had found in a human hospital.

Jarnix saw a Kantus figure walk in. The second in command Kendron walked in and sighed walking up to Jarnix.

"The Doctor will arrive in a few minutes. You're entire mouth has been deformed sir." Kendron slowly said thinking of the words coming out of his mouth. He slowly sat down a near by chair as he gulped and sighed before another Kantus monk came in. But he was different.

His tung was only single sided and he wore a helmet going down his face. The only visible area on his face was from his mouth and under. He had a wide black glass in front of his eyes making a V shape. He had armor like a Theron guard, as tall as a berserker, but the brains of a genius. His name was Rovy. He was a famous doctor and an excellent soldier, People also called him Rov for short.

Rov walked towards Jarnix and held a awkward shaped machine that was wrapped on Jarnix's head and put on his nose and mouth. Gas entered into his nose as Jarnix didn't even bother to fight it. The last words he heard before passing out was the deep voice of Rov.

"Sleep well colonel, you'll need it."

Kendron stepped out of the room meeting the rest of the Blood Seekers.

"Will the boss be joining?" Asked a confused Rouhk trying to peek through Kendron's shoulder and into Jarnix's room.

"No, We'll have to take this mission to our selfs. The lambent keep getting closer and they shall not spread our blood!" An angered Kendron snapped. He walked towards the new Reluk who was a Theron Guard, he then looked at Zumn who was a Theron Sentinel and nodded. "You two are also coming." He pointed towards Venju and looked at him with a snakeish grin. "We're all in. We're the only ones in." He shouted as he stormed off the scene and towards the Reaver pen as the others followed.

They had gotten a new Reaver that could hold the entire Blood Seekers letting the rest of their rides rest. The five entered as Reluk sighed seeing the empty seat beside him.

"Colonel..." Reluk sighed as he layed back and closed his eyes. He had been good friends with Jarnix earning his trust. They had always been friends and always had each others back Never turning on each other. They where like brothers.

Zumn redied his weapons as he chuckled a bit before looking at Venju. "You think we will be lucky?" He asked continuing packing his weapons.

"The Queen has so many tricks. We could sink in a hole and never come out. Or fly into heaven." Venju replied hopping onto his seat.

"Meaning?" Zumn asked back also climbing on board.

"One shall rise, one shall fall." Venju replied starring at Zumn.

"Let's hope we rise." Kendron murmured climbing on.

Kendron drove the reaver onto the air and swifted through the air charging for it's location.
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Rov moved his needle up and down through Jarnix's lip. The silk running through holding the wound down. Rov changed materials now and then as he fixed up Jarnix's lip neatly. He whiped the blood off with his small towel and let the colonel rest until he was ready to fight.

"How's he doing doctor?" A Theron suddenly walked in. It was Revix. Revix crossed his arms and walked inside the room with his Theron Guard uniform.

"He should rest for at least three days. He has lost alot of blood. And even then he won't be able to fight. He has too much battle wounds. I had to do surgery on his knee for being cracked, I had to re attach his shoulder, and fix his rib cage. You have one tough father young soldire." Rov replied still whiping blood off his apron.

"How do you know he is my father?" Revix ordered booming through the hospital.

Rov simply tapped his own head. "Instinct". Rov left the room leaving Revix and his injured father alone.
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The Reaver cut through the air as it flew down into a far away rock bridge. The five got off leaving the Reaver waiting.

"This is it, this is the base." Kendron announced hopping off leaving the rest to do the same.

"What we do now?" Rouhk asked?

"We wait." Kendron replied bowing his head down and began to meditate.

"Five lambent troops. Four easy to kill, the other has..." Kendron widened his eyes and gasped in a little bit of fear. "...Turk..." He whispered leaving the rest to gasp. Turk was a Legend in Lambent history. No one has ever defeated him, or even lay a scratch on him. He can take bullets and is as insane as a berserker. He was a Lambent Theron Sentinel Sargeant who had average muscle tone. He commands the lambent any where he goes standing at seven feet and three inches. He wore a long red Theron cape as his eyes glowed a crimson red due to the imulsion running through him. He wore locust tags with imulsion on them as he stored a huge machette on his back.

"Let's just kill the first four easily. They are just drones and grenadiers." Venju suggested.

"Good idea, let's take our snipers and take down the four patrols, I'll take the one on the left, Zumn and Reluk, you two take the middle ones and Venju take the left." Kendron ordered. The four took out their long shots as Kendron turned to see Rouhk with a disappointed face.

"I want to squash." Rouhk whined.

"OK, you take out..." Kendron sighed looking around. "There, that small horde of lambent. Only ten. You can take them right?"

"I can also enialate them!" Rouhk boomed taking out his mulcher and aiming it at the horde.

"Ready, aim, fire!" Kendron shouted as gunfire entered the space. The four snipers easily popped the heads off of the four patrols clean off while Rouhk crushed the lambent horde. Turk saw this as he got angered pointing his Torque bow at them. He fired hoping to get a shot but he only got covered. He reloaded perfectly as he shot again this time with a bounce letting the arrow join the Blood Seekers. They ran in different directions as the arrow blew them into the air. Zumn was blown off the bridge and onto the battle field as Reluk got up quickly. Seeing this he reloaded his long shot perfectly and shot a bullet straight into Turk's chest. Turk took a long breath before ignoring the pain and walk towards an injured Zumn.

Zumn started to get up and saw that Turk was coming his way. Zumn started to run up the hill towards the bridge the others were. Reluk shot again this time getting Turk on his foot. Turk roared through the air as he threw a near rock towards Reluk. Reluk was in caught on the long shot he failed to notice the stone going straight towards him. Luckily Venju tackled Reluk out of the way as the stone made a crack on the wall that Reluk's head was.

Reluk thanked Venju as he saw that Zumn was almost on top. The four on the bridge shot their weapons at the insane Turk but all it did was anger him. Zumn stretched his hand and caught Reluk's. Reluk pulled Zumn up as a charging arrow blocked their reunion sticking on a near by rock. The arrow blew up blowing one of Zumn's leg. Zumn yelped and shouted in pain as he fell on Rouhk. Rouhk quickly catched him as Turk flew off with the rest of the living lambent on their reavers.

"Please..... For the love of T'Chark please help me!" Zumn cried in pain as he moaned moving around like a worm. Rouhk put Zumn on the reaver as Kendron put some bandages and paper towels from his healing kit on the open leg. He also kept pressure on it trying to keep the blood still.

"Make it stop! I beg of you...Please!" Zumn cried as blood kept pouring making a puddle around him.

They layed Zumn on the two free spaces on the reavers while Kendron and the rest climbed on board and once again, Kendron had to take an ally to the hospital.
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Cast

Jay the Arbiter as Venju
SKORGE as Turk

**Jay the Arbiter** · 06-30-2009, 08:35 AM

What is it with the V? Why's Revix annoyed with Rov knowing Jarnix's is his dad?

Still, good stuff!

**TheRealBigBoss** · 06-30-2009, 11:52 AM

Nice chapter, I kinda liked Turk. Thought it was weird when he bailed though, he seemed to be doing pretty well in that fight.

**Cog Edward** · 07-01-2009, 01:51 AM

@ Boss: Well he had more dutys to do.

@ Jay: The V thing is like a visor so blood dosen't get in his eyes, Revix just dosen't want anyone to spy on him.

**Jay the Arbiter** · 07-01-2009, 07:23 AM

Ah Okay, i just had Revix as being proud to have Jarnix for a father (Wouldn't you?

)

**SKORGE** · 07-03-2009, 02:03 AM

Hey Edward I'll be reading through this, so it might be awhile before I post. How many chapters did I miss? Just this one?

**Cog Edward** · 07-04-2009, 11:16 AM

I don't know man. I'm moving on the 8th so I'm real busy and in a really bad mood some times. But I aint gonna take it out on any of you.

**SKORGE** · 07-05-2009, 12:08 AM

Originally Posted by Cog Edward

I don't know man. I'm moving on the 8th so I'm real busy and in a really bad mood some times. But I aint gonna take it out on any of you.

Well I hope you get happier soon. ANd thank you for not taking it out on us.

**Cog Edward** · 07-05-2009, 02:23 AM

Ya'll are my friends. Friends don't get mad at others.....most of the time....

.

**ChrisX** · 07-05-2009, 04:32 PM

I love that Fan Fic. Its unique because it about the life of a Locust instead of the average COG ones. Nice job.

**SKORGE** · 07-05-2009, 07:30 PM

Originally Posted by Cog Edward

Ya'll are my friends. Friends don't get mad at others.....most of the time....

.

I wish that were true, but sometimes your friend needs a slap across the head, since he won't stay out of your fridge!

**IIMarcusFenixII** · 07-05-2009, 08:06 PM

Originally Posted by SKORGE

I wish that were true, but sometimes your friend needs a slap across the head, since he won't stay out of your fridge!

I didn't know Skorge owned a fridge. I mean, I found his purple toaster...but where's that fridge?

**Wisdom Thumbs** · 07-05-2009, 08:20 PM

"Who wants TOAST!!"

"I like mine crispy!"

**IIMarcusFenixII** · 07-05-2009, 08:57 PM

Originally Posted by Wisdom Thumbs

"Who wants TOAST!!"

"I like mine crispy!"

Atleast someone got my joke.

**Cog Edward** · 07-06-2009, 01:30 AM

@ SKORGE: I just wanted Ice cream!
@ MarcusFenix: How else would he feed?
@ ChrisX: This is your first time reading a locust story? Wow. I got two. A human and this one.
@ Wisdom Toast: I do.

**ChrisX** · 07-06-2009, 01:34 AM

Yeah. Both kinds I enjoy. But for some reason this one just stood out for me lol.

**Cog Edward** · 07-06-2009, 01:37 AM

Sure....thanks. More coming up. Maybe tonight. I saty up all night alot since I'm in job vacation.

**Cog Edward** · 07-06-2009, 01:49 AM

And I might do it every week!

**Cog Edward** · 07-06-2009, 09:13 AM

Chapter 10: Remembering

Zumn yelped from the pain. Reluk quickly following the rolling bed he layed in. The blood was pouring fast and the doctors were losing supplies. Zumn grabbed the metallic sides of the bed as he yelled and tried to hold his pain. Jarnix slowly opened his eyes from hearing his scream. He closely analyzed the voice as he was in disbelief. Zumn usually was the most careful member in his squad as Jarnix slowly arose up like a mummy.

"Zumn!" He shouted as he struggled to move. There was some bandages and stitches on his lip as well as his right shoulder and left knee. They were held down with bandages as he had some wrap around bandages all over his ribs. He struggled to move as Revix quickly shot up and grabbed his dad from the back of his neck and left shoulder.

"Dad! You need to rest! You can't go off now!" Revix instead as he tried to push his dad towards the bed.

"Watch me!" Jarnix quickly pushed his son back into the chair he once sat on as another yell from Zumn entered into his ears. Zumn was like another son to him. Young, cocky, and some times annoying. Jarnix slowly got up as Revix shot back up again and grabbed his dad's left arm and put it on his neck. He walked with his dad around the hospital as people looked at the colonel with fear.

The stitches planted on him made his lip temporarily push up from one side making him look like he was frowning with a twisted face. Jarnix looked around and growled at who ever stared at him. They quickly re joined their business. Revix walked his father to the close room where Zumn was in as Jarnix stood in horror. His left leg was blown half way as the doctors struggled with the loss of blood. Bone fragments were popping out as the doctors wrapped bandages and tryed to heal the nervous Zumn. But it was beginning to be to late. Too much blood was lost as Zumn was turning pale. The doctors thankfully filled him up with sleeping gas as he passed out. Doctors where finally doing steady work as they began to fix the young soldiers leg.

Revix gulped as he walked with Jarnix towards Venju. "What happened?" Both Revix and Jarnix awaited an answer.

"The lambent legend Turk lives! He shot an arrow near Zumn's leg and made it into chunks!" Venju quickly answered still paying close attention to Zumn's injury.

"Impossible! Raam and I killed him ten years ago!" Jarnix quickly shouted out staring into Venju's worried eyes.

"I'm afraid the impossible has turned into the possible."

"But... I saw him die that night! It was all clear."
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It was a dark night in the hollow. Lambent were attacking the Nexus all over the place. Most of them where dealt with. Except Turk's squad. He was mention spotted near the Duplex dock. Raam and I rushed over towards it. We stopped at the beginning of the dock where it was high. There was some steps that went to the lower levels but something caught our attention. All locust troops where vanquished and the lambent seemed to be hiding. I was a captain back then and Raam was a soul killer. A soul killer was one of the most power fullest ranks. It was just under Colonel and General. Raam sniffed the air for tracks. I remember exactly what he said. It was easy to remember after all. He whispered to me the terrifying word.

"Turk..."

I nodded and walked with Raam around the dock. We found a young locust cyclops that day. He was begging for mercy. We where about to help until he was quickly shot in the head. The blood splattered all over the place. The skull passed over my head as chunks where shot into my armor. Raam quickly chuckled as the lambent yelled and tryed to attack us. We took quick cover. The bullets sounded like stones falling into a dark hole. Raam made hand signals to me to throw a grenade at a tall pillar next to them. They would never expect that I was aiming at the Pillar. It made a quick scream or two before it cracked. It landed on all the lambents shooting the affective imulsion into the walls. Raam and I layed our heads so the toxic wouldn't harm us. We rose up and saw heads, arms, and legs all over the place. Fragments and imulsion layed everywhere like wretches. They were all together like one huge pool. The imulsion was quickly sucked into a shadow. But not the shadow it self. Behind it was a fearsome leader named...Turk. We heard his quick cackle as my back shivered. Then it started...

Turk quickly opened a volley of fire at us as we did the exact same thing. Minutes past and none of us seemed to have the upper hand. We had little ammo left and my hands began to sweat. My lips where getting numb as my hand was stuck on my gun. My legs shivering as Raam panted and huffed from exhaustion. He nodded at me that night. I thought it would have been the last time I looked at him. We quickly turned to face Turk. He shot his gun towards the two of us taking turns. It then happened; We ran out of ammo as we threw our guns at him as hard as we could. It took little affect as I started to run towards him. Fear captured my eyes, pain took over my heart, and a yell filled my ears.

"Jarnix! Get back here!" Raam was worried I would die. We had been close friends since we were in the academy. I was the only friend he had. The others where all dead thank to the creature I was facing.

Turk only grinned at me like the demon he is before taking a quick swing. Luckily, I dodged it. We both took another swing at each other. It seemed as in slow motion as I captured his stomach while he took my chin. I left him out of breath as I took a hard hit and fell over. Raam took that time wisely and jumped out of cover. He ran towards Turk as he gasped for air. Both of them where stuck in a battle as I quickly recovered and jumped back up. Turk took a quick swift at Raam's leg. He fell down as Turk took out a grenade. He was about to tag Raam with it but I threw a rock straight at his hand. The grenade was knocked to the side still ready to be turned. I ran towards the beast with all the anger in my eyes. I took him down with a swift tackling spear and pumbled his face filled with punches. He pushed me to a side as Raam took both of his fists and slammed them into Turk's back. He turned around and hissed as he took a punch at Raam.

Raam lowered down at the wrong time as the fist captured his eye. He fell over the knocked down pillar and fell on the floor holding his eye. I threw a rock at his head as he turned around to face me. He ran at me hoping I was empty handed. I wasn't. I had the grenade he had dropped. While he was running towards me, Raam quickly got up holding his eye with one of the dead lambent's hammer burst. He opened fire at Turk's back while running towards myself and Turk. As Turk still charged towards me weakened, he took a wildly fist at me like an enraged berserker. I thankfully took a side step and tagged Turk with the grenade. Before it exploded in my face Raam came at the right time and kicked the body of Turk off of the thin rail between the beginning of the dock where it's high from below, and the water. He fell over and was quickly grouped with the water. We saw an explosion happen right after he fell. Water splashed up and rained down after a few seconds. Raam and I took a moment to look at the water that Turk had just 'died' on. Imulsion filled it up quickly as we left a while after.

A few days past and there was no word of Turk or the lambent. People thought of us as heroes for a long time.
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"So, if you killed him, how come he's still alive?" Reluk asked sarcastically looking at the colonel.

"Why don't you ask Zumn that?" Jarnix answered back with a sarcastically smile.

"Well if it's dead or alive, we need to kill it once more." Kendron answered back with a hard nod.

The blood seekers and Revix all nodded back as Revix walked his father back towards his room. On the way there they started to chatter.

"Pretty nice story father." Revix began trying to lift Jarnix.

"Thank you son. And also, thank you for staying with me." Jarnix sighed.

"Why? You mad at Herex and Cinchs?" Revix hopefully asked arriving at the room.

"No, I know they're in duty." Jarnix replied laying on the bed.

"Oh, well, just rest father. You're gonna need it." Revix sighed sitting on the chair.

Jarnix fell asleep easily, as another day passed.
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Cast

Jay the Arbiter as Venju
SKORGE as Turk

**Wisdom Thumbs** · 07-06-2009, 10:18 AM

Just one big problem: you kept using malapropisms. Lots of the wrong words in the wrong situations. Or was that intentional?

A couple smaller ones. "Zumn quickly sat up very slowly," for example. And the shootout with Turk went on for hours? Minutes would be better, unless RAAM, Turk and Jarnix were dragging ammo trucks behind them.

Still, I liked it for its story, and the pacing was alright. So I give it a thumbs up.