GOW: Origins [FanFic]

[I Pwn Noobs]

I would just like to post, that I use to do Gears OF War storys a very long time ago. I moved on to Left 4 Dead and started doing some popular fanfics which were publised offically on www.Left4deadforums.com I've decided to return to Gears OF War forums to finish some storys I'm thinking of doing. The Story Is A Complete Different Plot, But Same Dialogue.
Here I go.
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Planet Sera:
6:28Pm
00.200Hours.

"Anya, Come In..."
"Marcus, I have heavy Intel in your area I can't hear you."
"Hold on Anya I've got hostiles."
A grub hole appeared from 3 different areas. Marcus quickly got out one of his frags and he threw the frag towards one of the three grub holes.

As the Grub Hole locked up the Locusts started to come out from the other 2 grub holes. Marcus quickly got out his lancer and reloaded his gun and shot towards the Locust. Marcus got behind some cover and started to shout:
"GOD!!... Here We Go Again..."
Marcus took one of his hand of the lancer as he got another frag and chucked it over the cover. He began to reload his gun as the Locust flesh and guts dismembered from their body. A Locust arm flyed over the cover and landed infront of Marcus as he had a smirk in his face as he got up from the cover and began to continue his mission and to activate the Sonic Resonator in the Locust Underground home.

5 Years Before Adam Fenix, Was Persumed Dead
Message From Adam Fenix About His Son Marcus Fenix.

"I rarely see Marcus most days. I just don't know who he is, and it's all my fault. I lied to him about what happened to Elaine, and the longer I lie, the harder it is to come clean. Kids know when you're lying. Then their trust withers and dies."

Marcus had that note he carried around with him to reminisce himself of his father and how Marcus was sorry for not seeing his father as much. Marcus began to have a tear in his eye as he quickly whiped the tear away and began to carry on and plant the Sonic Resonator.

"Marcus... Marcus... Are You There?"
"Repeat Anya, I'm Here"
"I've got Intel On Where The Locust Underground Main Base Is"
"Understood Anya"

Marcus began to walk towards the S1-67 Helicopter as he saw 3 old faces appear. Dominic Santiago smiled towards Marcus as Marcus looked at the rest of the Delta Squad having a little smirk on his face. Cole was talking to Baird as he saw Dominic looking at something. Cole then turned to look and saw Marcus as he shouted while Marcus was walking:
"WELL WELL WELL... LOOK WHO THE **** DECIDED TO SHOW UP..."

Marcus carried on walking to the Helicopter as the dust from the floor began to glide by Marcus, with a thousands words in his eyes it was the beginning of the end.
Gears OF WAR: Origins.


I'll carry on later, but I thought it should end they're as a little starter teaser.

[SKORGE]

Great job, I liked it, but there were a few spelling typo's.

[I Pwn Noobs]

Planet Sera
00300 Hours
8:25PM

Darkness began to fall over Sera. Marcus was on the S167-Helicopter as he looked out into the distance. The Delta Team had to go underground to the Hollow.The Hollow is the Locust Original Home which was undiscovered untill Emergence day.

"Anya, We're going to the Hollow"
"Marcus You can't do it alone, I can send..."
"I've got the whole Delta team here Anya"
"HOLY ****... HOLY ****T MAN...."
"Cole What Is It?"
"Marcus Please don't tell me were going down there?"
"Marcus this is Anya I can't hear you we must be getting close to the Locust Home"
"Hmmmm... too close."

The S167-Helicopter flew down into the Underground Hollow as it seemed to be getting deeper and deeper. It virtually went all black as the Helicopter had to turn on it's lights to regain it's journey down to the Hollow. Dom Santiago began to whisper carefully to all of the Delta Team:
"Guys can you hear that?"
The Helicopter lights began to flash and flash as the lights finally turned on. A Skorge was riding on a Hydra as the Hydra tried to crash the Helicopter into the side rocky walls.

Baird was desperatly trying to control the helicopter as the Hydra began to try and smash the helicopter. Marcus began to shoot at the Hydras tentacles as it seemed to inflict damage and hurt the Hydra.
"Shoot at it's tentacles"
The Delta team began to the shoot at the Hydras tentacles as the Hydra smashed into the walls of the Underground Hollow. The Skorge riding the Hydra went smashing into the wall and fell off down into the darkness.

Cole and Dom was shooting at the Hydra tentacles while Marcus began to go to the Helicopters turret and try to inflict even more damage. The Hydra began to open up it's mouth but Marcus revved up the turret and began to shoot at the Hydra mouth. The Hydra began to slow down as the Helicopter was about to go through a small gap.

The S167-Helicopter got through the gap as they all thought the Hydra was gone. Cole began to raise his gun in the air and started to shout:
"HELL YEH... DON'T MESS WITH THE COLE TRAIN BABY"
Baird began to control the Helicopter to a normal speed, as Marcus could only scrinch his eyes as he knew this werent the last of the Hydra.

The Hydra enormous strength and size smashed through the small gap as it began to open it's mouth again for the last and final time. Marcus revved up the turret once more as he shot at the Hydras tentacles as it smashed into the underground walls. The Hydra began to fall down into the darkness and was finally persumed dead.

Baird finally got the helicopter under perfect control and reached to the Locust underground home called the Hollow.
"Anya, were at the Hollow..."
"Marcus you need to plant the Sonic Resonator in the inner part of the Hollow"
"Over & Out Anya"

Baird landed the Helicopter in the Inner Part Of The Hollow far from where the Locust could not spot them. The Delta Team got out of the Helicopter as they began to prepare and load their guns for any Locust going to attack them. Marcus sighed over at what the Locust were doing and it seemed to be a bomb. Which was later known to all of Gears OF War humanity the Lightmass bomb.

Marcus Kept hearing a voice in his head:
"We Must Sink Jacinto... We Must."
Marcus snapped out of the Day Dream as he shook his hand and began to carry on his journey and plant the Sonic Resonator.

[I Pwn Noobs]

Planet Sera:
The Hollow Part III
9:21PM
Event's Just After Emergence Day.

The Delta Team arrived into the Inner Hollow to plant the Sonic Resonator and finally whipe out the Locust Home. Before Emergence Day The Hollow was undiscovered and Delta last remaining Human home was Jacinto. Marcus Fenix and his Delta team were to plant the Sonic Resonator in the inner Hollow and annihilate the Locust and their home.

"Anya, Were In The Hollow"
"Marcus You need to planet the Sonic Resonator in the middle of the inner Hollow. I'm having heavy intel your area so you can't be far"
"Understood Anya, Delta Out"
"COME ON MARCUS I WANNA KICK SOME ASS... DON'T KEEP THE COLE TRAIN WAITING!"
"****ing Hell Cole, Dont Get Yourself Found"
"THE COLE TRAIN NEEDS SOME ACTION"

One of the Locust Snipers looked through it's scope as it began to aim its gun at the Delta Team. Baird turned his head as he looked over to where the Locust Sniper was. The Locust fired its gun at Baird as the bullet which travelled quicker then light pierced into Bairds right shoulder. The blood began to come out as Baird fell to the floor as soon as the bullet hit.
Marcus, Dom, Cole got behind cover as they began to prepare up their guns as the Locust found out their posistion.

The Locusts began to ride on their Reavers and fly over towards the Delta Team. The Locusts eyes were filled with no remorse as they began to fire 6/7 bullets per second towards the Delta Team. Marcus blindfired his gun over the cover as he fired bullets towards the Locust on the reaver.

"These Mother ****ers Just Don't Die" Cole Yelled In A Aggressive Voice
Baird began to loose blood that was coming out from his right shoulder. He tilted his head back and pressing his hand onto his shoulder. He began to try and crawl into cover slowly as the blood began to show trail marks on the floor. Dominic Santiago looked upon Baird as Baird nodded towards Dom like Baird knew he was going to die. A reaver began to fly down towards Baird, but Baird grabbed a frag grenade out of his left pocket and stuck the grenade onto the reaver. The Reaver flyed off clinging it's arm to the body of Baird. The Reaver flew off as Dom looked upon Baird on the reaver. For Baird time seemed to go slow as 3 ticks was all it took for the frag to explode.

The Frag Grenade exploded as Dominic Santiago looked upon Baird Death. The body of Baird was almost discinigrated as the explosion seemed to whipe out both of Baird & The Reaver. Dom Shouted towards Marcus yelling:
"MARCUS Baird is Dead I repeat Baird is Dead"
Marcus was too busy trying to fight of the remaining Locust as he said to himself:
"Ahhhh ****..."
Cole began to run out of Cover, yelling towards the Locust while firing his Lancer repeatedly. The Locust began to shoot towards Cole but it was almost Impossible as Cole killed the remaining few horde.
"Cole what the **** are you doing, you trying to get yourself killed?"
"Hey don't mess with the Cole Train baby thats my saying"

Dominic Santiago told the remaining Delta Team, that Baird Is Dead.
"Anya... Anya come in **** Baird's Dead, he sacrificed himself in battle"
"I'm sorry Marcus I'll inform Colonel Hoffman but we still need to do what we came here for"
"Over And Out Anya"

The Delta Team began carry on deeper into the Hollow. Marcus, Dom, Cole got behind cover as Marcus peered his head over to look at the Locust experiment, as his eyes began to glare at the Lightmass Bomb.

THE LIGHTMASS BOMB
The Lightmass Bomb is a bomb created supposedly from a process similar or related to Dr. Helen Cooper's Lightmass Process. While it is always referred to as a bomb, it functions as a cluster of highly explosive guided missiles/torpedoes in practise. Due to the nature of The Hollow and its Imulsion-flooded tunnels, this torpedo-based design was the most efficient way to deploy the Lightmass warheads. Consequently, the weapon requires an immense amount of data on the area between the launch point and targets to guide the individual projectiles. This was originally to be provided by the Resonator sonic mapping device, but when the device did not perform as planned, data collected by Adam Fenix had to be substituted. It is a very destructive weapon when used effectively as seen in the final cutscene after defeating General RAAM in Act 5: Desperation. After being deployed at Timgad Valley from the derailed Tyro Pillar, the projectiles successfully filtered through the underground tunnels and destroyed a significant populous of the Locust, as well as the Kryll breeding grounds.

The Delta Team, had more things to worry about as it was a matter of time before the Lightmass Bomb was ready to kill.


Hope you liked, and The Lightmass Bomb was copied as I think it shows valuable information to help you understand how affective the Lightbomb is, all the rest is information from my head .

[I Pwn Noobs]

Planet Sera:
The Inner Hollow
00800 Hours
10:20PM.

2 Locusts that were guarding the project to the Lightmass Bomb began to walk towards the Delta Team, as they were guarding the Lightmass bomb but the two Locusts were unaware they're death was going to be a gruesome one. Marcus Fenix peered back from behind the cover as Dominic Santiago peered back form behind the cover aswell.

Dominic Santiago & Marcus Fenix looked each other and nodded as they came from behind their cover and revved up their chainsaw as they connected it to the flesh of the Locusts. The Chainsaw ripped into the flesh of the Locust as the Locusts could only hear a noise that will haunt them forever. Their guts and intestines began to come out from their body and 3 quatres of their body was all split up into little pieces.
"Anyone For Locust Tonight?" Cole Chuckled Loudly...
"Oh Shut Up Cole!" Marcus In A Deeply Anoyyed Voice.

The Delta Team persuaded down the everlasting statis. Marcus told the Delta Team to stop as he looked around to see if any Locust were around. Infront of Marcus was soon to be the biggest fate for Sera and also would be the fall for Jacinto if the Delta Team did not stop it.
"Anya come in they're some sort of bomb here"
"Marcus what is the inscription security code?"
"Uhh.... 33763"
Anya typed the Security Intel code into the Computer as she realised that the Delta Team were in serious danger and that planting the Sonic Resonator would activate the Lightmass Bomb.

"MARCUS! You need to get out of they're... that is the Lightmass Bomb if the Sonic Resonator detonates then it will activate it."

"ACTIVATE WHAT ANYA!"

"The Lightmass Bomb, It is a bomb that the Locust have created to sink our last home... Jacinto!"

"****... So What Do We Do Now"

"We need you and the Delta Team to try and deactivate the Lightmass Bomb,
On my Computer it shows heavy intel in that area so they're must be some sort of computer you can put the code in"

"What Code Anya?"

"Marcus put in the code 82293"

Marcus quickly ran over to the Computer that was operating the Lightmass Bomb. Marcus typed in the code 82293. As soon as Marcus typed in the code it had a security breach on it.

ERROR WARNING, SECURITY PASSWORD INVALID... ERROR WARNING!
The Locusts began to arrive and grub holes began to emerge from the floor.
"Ahhhh ****! Hostiles"
"Marcus you've hacked in I'll finish the rest of for you just keep defending"
"Over And Out Anya"

Two Grub Holes emerged from the floor. Dominic Santiago legs began to go numb on him as fear took over Dom. Dom was behind cover as the blood of the Locust began to come over the cover. Cole chucked a frag grenade from his right pocket as the explosion emerged the Locust body parts were flying in quaters as the blood landed on Dom and the intenstines landed infront of him.Dom began to erupt with sickness as it was all too much for him. Dom looked down to the floor and began to have flashbacks off with his wife Maria and that he dreamed occasionaly he was still with her but ending up still being in the war. Marcus & Cole was shouting for Dom to snap out of it, but Dom was now in a world of his own as the only thing he could hear was the laughter of him and his wife.

Marcus got out another frag grenade, and he began to aim and swing it towards One Of The Two Grub Holes. Marcus realeased the frag grenade from his grip as it flyed into the air and came down into the Grub Hole. The Locusts were climbing out but 3 ticks was all it took for the frag grenade to explode. The Explosion locked up the Grub hole and stopped Locusts coming out from it:
"Ha... One Dead Grub" Marcus shouted to Delta Squad.
One Grub Hole was still emerged. The Locusts just kept coming, from the hole.
Cole shouted to the Delta Squad:
"F***! This... The Cole Train Waits For Nobody"
Cole jumped over from the cover as he whipped out his Shotgun and began to shotgun the Locust body apart. A Locust got close to him but Cole meeled the Locust and shotgunned him. Cole looked down at the Grub hole as he shouted to the Locusts coming up from the Grub Hole:
"DONT MESS WITH THE COLE TRAIN... AHA!"
Cole chucked a frag grenade down in the Grub Hole and just walked away towards Marcus as the Locusts began to aim their gun towards Cole but were quickly extinguished as the Frag Grenade went off and killed the Locusts and shutting the last Grub Hole.

"Anya I've cleared the Hostiles any word on the Lightmass Bomb?"

"Marcus I've deactivated the Lightmass Bomb... You need to plant that Sonic Resonator and get the hell out of there"

"Over & Out Anya, I'll see what I can do"

Marcus walked towards Dom as he offered his hand. Dominic Santiago looked at his hand and looked up to Marcus Scarred and pale face. Dom grabbed Marcus hand as Marcus pulled Dom Up.

"Come On Dom... Lets Go Finish This"

To Be Continued....

[I Pwn Noobs]

I would just like to see peoples thoughts and if they would like this to continue. I do think it's a good concept and I've done some neat stuff but I need peoples opinions before I continue but so far I've only got one person so if people could add some replys. Much Appreciated.

[smurf plastic]

The sentences need to be refined more, personally I'm seeing parts that need to be made into multiple sentences. Other than that not bad.

[SKORGE]

Again, I like the story & great chapter! For some suggestions, you should look over your work more, because there was a few typo's here and there, like 'A Skorge' instead of 'Skorge'.