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L337 Lemming
06-25-2006, 05:03 PM
sorry if this is meant to go somewhere but i didnt know if i should have put it at the end of Mooses one as it is his thread safter all. im not rly good but i like what i wrote, dont expect the next divinci code, and i know i ramble a bit but thats how i write. enjoy (i hope) !

only part one of two as it is longer than i thought! :D



Crapes knew it wouldn’t be long until they were all dead. He had seen the “leftovers” from when those things killed, when they burst out of the floor and wiped out such a large amount of Sera’s population. This was ridiculous; how were they to fight these…things? They came in all shapes and sizes, and it took nearly a full clip to put one down. It didn’t help that these friggin’ rifles were so ineffective. The lancer rifles he and his men carried into battles were good against human opponents and had proven that time and time again during the imulsion wars, but they were prone to jamming mid battle, causing any kind of tactical manouvers involving covering fire, pretty useless. He was amazed he wasn’t already dead like the three who hadn’t been as fortunate. Or was he fortunate? The only reason he wasn’t like Kibbs, Mcmahon, and Ryder was because they had stayed to suppress whilst him and the handful of survivors ran like cowards. There was no honour in that which he had done, and boy did he know it. The pain that cut deep into his guts when he turned from them and ran was unbearable, he had effectively sent those men to their deaths and for what? So he could sit here in this empty resturaunt and wait for the locust to find him? “Some war hero” he muttered under his breath whilst taking a slow drag on his limp cigarette. Crapes had been awarded the distinguished cross of honour but three weeks ago for taking over one of the key imulsion drilling sites, and now he was slumped behind a table, feeling sorry for himself and wishing it would all end, well if the locust didn’t find and kill him, then maybe the cigarette would speed up the process.
“any sign of the bastards?” Crapes murmered into the general direction of the window
“No sir, no sign yet” replied Miller, the sharpshooter of the group “looks like they got bored of hunting and gave up”
“they don’t ‘Give up’ son, they’re ruthless and when they find us, I’m sure they would be only too happy to demonstrate this to you” Miller stopped looking over to Crapes and tried to focus his scope so as he could see the surrounding plaza better. Well, it was a plaza, but now all that remained were some lumps of stone, and half a pillar upon which once stood a monument to the simpler days, when nobody shot each other over some ‘new age petrol’ but what did he know? He wasn’t drafted in to contemplate the pros and cons of the situation, he was called in because he could handle the sniper rifle better than his fellow ‘green horns’ and had stupidly volunteered for this outfit, thinking it would be a simple life, but this ‘life’ had been anything but simple, they had to move during the light hours because the creepy bastards didn’t like the light, and at night they would hunker down for hours of keeping watch and not sleeping. He was exhausted, the last time he had a night of uninterrupted sleep was weeks ago, now he’d be lucky to get such a luxury. It was just him, corporal O’Conner and the sergeant now though, the three of them hiding in this crap hole of a resturaunt, and only him doing any of the important work. He put it down to being the most inexperienced, the rookie of the group. That or it was because the sergeant Crapes was a hard ass, though it would take a brave man to tell it to him, and that man sure as hell wasn’t Miller.

Just as he was getting comfy, O’Conner received a transmission over the squads com-link system,
“what is it Miller?” he wearily asked

Zoso Fan
06-25-2006, 05:10 PM
That was really good :), i just wished this part would have ended differently

L337 Lemming
06-25-2006, 05:20 PM
it just happened to be the end of the page in microsoft word! but i think i should have bought in O'Connor sooner as there is jack info on him! but thanks for reading!

L337 Lemming
06-25-2006, 05:35 PM
time for the shorter part 2! again, bad grammar but i try!
i might carry on, or leave it as it is... dunno what else to put as i am pants at writing battles. . . .




sir, you and the sarge better look at this”
“for christs sake Miller, describe it to me!” O’Connor’s response came sarcastically flowing from his mouth, as he held back the grin from the sergeant.
“We have contacts, multiple contacts moving on our position” before the sentence was finished, the sergeant had sprung to his feet, slammed a fresh clip of ammo into his Lancer and was halfway up the stairs to Miller’s vantage point, O’Connor following behind, gathering his kit and putting out the fire they had started as a means of warmth.
On the first floor, the sergeant grabbed the rifle from the rookies hands, pointed it across the plaza and allowed only two words to escape his mouth
“Holy ****!” came the response to what he saw, there must have been hundreds of them, all spread out and erratically searching the rubble for anything they could find, slowly transcending upon his squads location. They moved in an odd fashion. Many of them almost casually wandering, but that guise did not fool him, he had seen them spring towards a battle at the slightest notice, he had seen them jump clean over a car, and their blistering speed led to a quick death to whomever they ran towards.

O’Connor grabbed his binoculars and swung them towards the location in which the sergeant was gawping, when he sighted them, his cigarette lazily tumbled from his open mouth, leaving a trail of ash following it to the floor.
“What do we do? We aint got a chance against all of them!” O’Connor asked, on the brink of shouting.
“Keep it down” Miller whimpered, the fear in the rookies voice evident “We cant take all of em” Miller spat out, the words taking a while to impact upon the sergeant
“We can damn near try!” the sergeant answered
“But sir, that’s as good as condemning ourselves to death” came O’Connor’s instantaneous response “We won’t even pass for a snack to a group that big”
“We have a duty to protect this planet, and I will be damned if I’m gonna let the deaths of our fellow soldiers be for nothing. Pick your targets and fire on my command, lets see if we can catch the freaks off guard”
of course the sergeant knew this skirmish could well be the shortest ever recorded. The enemy out numbered them at least four to one. But seeing as how the cigarette hadn’t killed him, and he was out; that seemed to leave only one option…..


“Ready sir” Miller confirmed, his voice trembling, the colour from his face flushed, as he steadied his rifle and cocked it back, ready
“O’Connor, get some fireworks ready, rig the downstairs structure”
“Ay sir” came a vacant answer, O’Connor was scared that much was evident just by looking, the normally cool, calm Irishman was now a hollow shell of his former self.
“Okay boys, let’s earn our pay-check shall we?” Crapes raised his Lancer and bellowed the order “Open Fire!”

Zoso Fan
06-25-2006, 05:39 PM
Now that one ended greately! :) Are you righting this on the spot? Its really good!

Flak
06-25-2006, 07:31 PM
We have to stop using these fanfics as an excuse to swear; I'm going to start editing them if it keeps up. And you won't like my edits. ;)

Zoso Fan
06-25-2006, 07:51 PM
Here you go Flak, straight from the Cliffy photo gallery! :)

http://imageserver4.textamerica.com/user.images.x/97/IMG_434897/_0625/T520060625151400856.jpg

Flak
06-25-2006, 08:45 PM
LOL! Awesome :)

L337 Lemming
06-26-2006, 02:42 PM
what? it wasnt an excuse to swear i assure you! if i wanted to swear i really would just do it! apologies, but it sets for a better mood! and though the lack of any orginization may have made it seem amatuerish, no i was not writing it on the spot! sorry for any confusion my multipost caused! in fact, i might tidy that up. thanks for reading!

Rexx Doom
06-28-2006, 06:57 PM
Pretty good man!! I liked it alot. good suspense and setting the mood.

locosenor13
06-28-2006, 08:03 PM
Yea nice writing! you should continue writing fanfics!

TNT
06-28-2006, 08:08 PM
Good writing, the first one didnt have enough paragraphs or anything in it so it made it kidna hard to read, but the they both have good writing

The Evil Hat
06-29-2006, 11:08 PM
its really good i hope theres more. everyone on these boards seems to be really talented.


We have to stop using these fanfics as an excuse to swear; I'm going to start editing them if it keeps up. And you won't like my edits. ;)
oh we cant i gues i will stop in mine

P.S. someone please post in my fan fic i almost dont care what it is just depressing having the most recent part set for a week with no posts

L337 Lemming
07-14-2006, 07:42 PM
sorry all, i have not been on in a looooong while. had some cruddy exam stuff to take care of. i will probably put up another piece, but it is really rough so mucho mucho tweaking is required! but i dont know, it leaves it on a good ending. thanks for all the posotive comments, i appreciate them all. :)